WELCOME TO PIRATES
V2.2! WOULD YOU LIKE INSTRUCTIONS?
YES
THE YEAR IS 1665.
YOU ARE A SWASHBUCKLING, SEAFARING LASS ABOARD THE HMS COMMODORE, A LAW-ABIDING
MERCHANT VESSEL WHICH SAILS THE TRADE ROUTES OF THE CARIBBEAN. THESE TRADE ROUTES
ARE OFTEN BESET BY PIRATE SHIPS: VESSELS FULL OF VILLAINOUS ROGUES WHO WILL
STOP AT NOTHING TO GET THEIR HANDS ON YOUR CARGO. I WILL BE YOUR EYES AND
HANDS. DIRECT ME WITH COMMANDS OF 1 OR 2 WORDS.
(IF STUCK TYPE HELP
FOR SOME HINTS)
A FELLOW SHIP IS
SIGHTED OFF THE PORT BOW. IT IS FLYING THE UNION JACK, BUT SOMETHING SEEMS
SUSPICIOUS. SHOULD YOU WAIT, OR INVESTIGATE THE SHIP?
WAIT
Wendy laughed, looking over her brother’s shoulder. “You’re not
meant to do that! It’s right there in the text. You always play things so
safe.”
THE SHIP ALIGNS
ITSELF ALONGSIDE THE COMMODORE. ITS CAPTAIN, A TALL AND BROAD-SHOULDERED MAN WITH A MAGNIFICENT BLACK BEARD BRAIDED WITH RIBBONS, STANDS AT THE HELM. ONE GLANCE FROM HIM STRIKES FEAR INTO YOUR
HEART. YOU REALISE SOMETHING IS TERRIBLY WRONG, BUT IT IS TOO LATE TO RAISE THE
ALARM.
RAISE ALARM
IT IS TOO LATE TO
RAISE THE ALARM.
WAIT
A PLANK BRIDGES THE
GAP BETWEEN THE TWO SHIPS AND THE RED-DRESSED CAPTAIN BOARDS. WITHOUT A
MOMENT’S HESITATION HE SHOOTS THE BO’SUN IN THE CHEST.
YOU HAVE A DAGGER
STRAPPED TO YOUR LEG.
YOU HAVE A PAIR OF
PISTOLS AT YOUR WAIST.
FIRE PISTOL
YOU HAVE NO SHOT IN
YOUR PISTOLS. TO YOUR LEFT THERE IS A WEAPONS STORE WITH BULLETS AND GUNPOWDER.
GO LEFT
YOU ENTER THE
WEAPONS STORE. AS YOU ARE LOADING ONE PISTOL A SHADOW DARKENS THE DOORWAY. YOU
LOOK UP TO SEE THE MEAN FIGURE OF THE DREAD PIRATE STEDE BONNET, CREW MEMBER OF THE
NOTORIOUS QUEEN ANNE'S REVENGE. HE HAS A REVOLVER POINTED AT YOU. THERE IS NO WAY YOU
COULD FINISH LOADING AND FIRE IN TIME.
FIRE PISTOL
THERE IS NO WAY YOU
COULD FINISH LOADING AND FIRE IN TIME.
“It just said that, John! Weren’t you reading?” complained
Michael, seated to his brother’s right. “You always type pointless stuff.”
“I have to try every course of action, don’t I?” John defended
himself. “Go on, if you know better, what do I do now?”
“Hide somewhere! There must be barrels of gunpowder and stuff in
the store.”
HIDE
BONNET HAS ALREADY
SEEN YOU. THERE IS NOTHING TO GAIN FROM TRYING TO HIDE.
“Hah,” said John smugly. “Now who’s typing pointless commands?”
“Mine was better than what you
wrote,” said Michael, but John had stopped paying attention, clicking his
fingers triumphantly.
“I know!”
THROW DAGGER
YOU SWIFTLY BEND
DOWN AND GRASP THE KNIFE STRAPPED TO ONE LEG. WITH A FLICK OF YOUR WRIST, IT
SPINS TOWARDS BONNET AND EMBEDS ITSELF IN HIS HEART.
“Yeah! One pirate down,” John cheered, as Michael sulked over not
having thought of using the dagger.
“When do I get a go? You
always go on the computer first, it’s not fair.”
Wendy smiled at her brothers’ bickering. She was secretly pleased
that they found her game gripping enough to puzzle and argue over it. She’d
poured a lot of hours into ‘Pirates’ and sometimes wondered if she’d be better
off dedicating her time to something else, but John and Michael’s reactions
encouraged her to think that maybe she could have some success as a game
creator one day, if she kept at it and did well enough at university.
Just then, their father’s head poked around the door. “Boys! Your
mother and I can hear you arguing from the garden. Either play nicely with each
other or you won’t be allowed on the computer again.” It was an often-repeated
threat, but the three children had no doubt that their father would carry it
through, so John and Michael immediately quietened down.
Mr. Darling turned to Wendy and gave her a significant look, then
beckoned. Wendy sighed and reluctantly followed him out of the playroom. She
had a feeling she knew what was coming next.
Mr. Darling shut the playroom door behind them and addressed Wendy
quietly. “Wendy, I bought that computer and modem for use with my work, and I
gave you, and only you, permission to
use it for preparation for your university course. It is a serious tool, not a
toy for you and your brothers to waste valuable time on.”
Wendy bit back several comments regarding how little her father
would even know about what a computer could be used for. His grasp of the world
of computing was so limited, yet he tried to come off as some sort of expert.
Still, she depended on him allowing her access to the computer and so she had
to play by his rules. “I’m sorry, Dad. I just wanted John and Michael to test
out my newest programming venture.” She tried to phrase it in terms that would
appeal to her father, but Mr. Darling was not fooled.
“A game, Wendy. About pirates.
How is this relevant to a course in computing at a leading university?”
“Dad, I don’t leave for Durham for another month!” Wendy burst out
in frustration. “You can’t expect me to be preparing for it twenty-four hours a
day! And the game is relevant. A lot
of the most well-known programmers and System Operators on BBSes develop and
play these sorts of games. They’re at the forefront of computing.” This was
fudging the truth slightly, but her father didn’t know enough about modern
computing or BBSes to contradict her.
“And that’s another thing, Wendy,” said Mr. Darling, his nostrils
flaring slightly. “These BBSes. Do you know how much our phone bill cost last
month thanks to you dialling in day and night?”
Wendy wilted slightly. She knew she’d cost her parents a lot of money
through her ignorance about long-distance calling charges and her eagerness to
explore this new network of computer users that had suddenly opened up to her.
But she’d already been lectured, apologised, promised to be more careful so
many times that she didn’t know what else there was to say. “I do know, Dad. I didn’t realise how much
it was costing at the time but I won’t do it again. I’ve already promised that.”
Mr. Darling’s glare didn’t soften. “Make sure you keep that
promise. And I don’t want to see you wasting time on the computer with your
brothers in future.” With that, he turned on his heel and walked towards the
door, adding, “You must have course reading to be getting on with,” as he left.
Wendy ground her teeth together; her father always had to have the
last word. “I’ve already done all my
course reading,” she muttered bitterly.
“Wendy?” Michael peered timidly through a gap in the playroom
door. “We’re stuck again. Can you come and give us a clue?”
Wendy smiled down at her youngest brother and ruffled his fair
hair. “Of course.”
“Did you get into trouble because of us?” he asked anxiously,
trailing behind her into the playroom. John leaned on the back of the computer
chair and waited for her answer in apprehension.
“Oh, just the same old stuff,” said Wendy, lightening the mood for
her brothers’ benefit. Her dad couldn’t take away from her the enjoyment that came
from creating this game, or take away her brothers’ excitement at playing it,
no matter how hard he tried. “Dad’s all bark and no bite.” And in a month’s time, I’ll be free to do what I like, she thought.
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So, this is a great start! One entry in to my new routine and I'm already a day late x3 Yesterday I had a completely free day and managed to forget to do my blog post. Today I was busy all day but made myself squeeze in some editing so that I could get this up before midnight. Let's see if I can do better on Tuesday ;)
I considered posting up another random excerpt from midway through the story, but decided to treat you guys to a longer chunk of writing, the first half of Chapter One. Though I may edit it a lot in the future, I'm pretty set on opening the story in this way, with text from Wendy's 'Pirates' game. In case you're not familiar with text-based adventures, that's what this is. You can read a bit about them here, and I also highly recommend the online documentary 'GET LAMP', which will appear in a future Tuesday post. I based the wording and format off transcripts from Will Crowther's Adventure, the first and most famous text adventure game.
Originally this passage featured Hook and Starkey of the Jolly Roger rather than Blackbeard and Bonnet of the Queen Anne's Revenge, but then I realised it would be rather stupid to have those characters appear in Wendy's adventure and also be characters in the novel, so I quickly changed the names. xD Bonnet was the only member of Blackbeard's crew that I could find a name for (on Wikipedia, anyway).
This is all still first draft territory, but I hope that you find it an interesting opening nonetheless :) Critiques are welcomed.
He-he, I've always noticed that the less free time I have, the more I manage to squeeze in it :)
ReplyDeleteNice first draft. It obviously needs tightening up, but you've done well introducing the characters, Wendy's interests and the ways they influence her relationships within the family.
P.S. Is Nana going to be in it in some shape?
P.S. Is Nana going to be in it in some shape?
DeleteI hope so! I'm just having trouble deciding what shape she should take in a more-or-less-modern AU. Maybe you could help me out with this one. Should I keep her as the extremely intelligent, almost human family dog, or incorporate her in some other form? A more cyberpunk-y form?